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Rainbow Dash moaned quietly as she awoke, groggily opening her eyes before flinching to the bright sunlight assaulting her vision. Despite the night of heavy drinking she was no longer intoxicated, on the contrary she was completely sober and free from pain. "I guess you won AJ." The blue mare managed to say during a yawn before her vision came into focus. The sight was mesmerising yet somehow familiar, a bright sea of fluffy clouds dominated her view several of which were fashioned into columns and paths, even buildings. "AJ? Pinkie?" Rainbow struggled to her hooves with caution, noticing she was standing on the cloud sky herself. But as she stood there she felt the soft floor support all her weight, something that she seemed to already know despite never being off the ground before.

Rainbow slowly trotted across the cushioned floor, each step leaving a soothing touch on her hooves. She gazed down over the edge of her cloud, far below her she saw what looked like another less extravagant collection of clouds covering the distant land. Straining her eyes she could just make out the port town, what must have been hundreds or thousands of meters below her. "Is that, Mareina? Where am I?"

"Welcome dear pegasus." The surprised mare quickly turned around to face the approaching figure, her hooves delicately trotted across the silencing floor leaving her approach only identifiable by her calming voice and alluring perfumed aroma. "What is you name dear?" The unicorn's coat glowed with a brilliant white, almost more pure than even the clouds themselves. Her comforting sapphire eyes gazed into the newcomer's own with care and compassion.

"Hey, I'm Rainbow Dash, some just call me Dash though." Rainbow looked around cautiously, still unaware of where she was or what was happening. "Where am I? And who are you? And how did I get here?" She stated, almost demanding to be answered.

The elegant mare smiled down, placing a hoof on the new arrival's shoulder. "That is a beautiful name, I will try to answer as many of your questions and worries as I can, you can come to me whenever you need advice or comfort. My name is Rarity, I used to be an actress in Canterlot until one night, when there was an accident with the rigging holding the lights. Like you I found my way here as all ponies eventually do." Rarity softly stroked her new friend's mane, hoping to comfort her. "This land is known as Heaven."

Rainbow backed away from Rarity's soothing touch. "Wait, what are you talking about? I mean, Heaven is for..." She shook her head quickly looking around for signs of home. "No, I was just drinking with my friend, Pinkie's waiting for me back at home, I-" Her words cut short as a white hoof pressed against her lips.

"Rainbow Dash dear, I know how you are feeling. When the lights fell on me I woke up here, at first I refused to accept it. I was loved in Equestria, hundreds would come to Canterlot to adore my performance, my beauty and my acting. Inevitably, I needed to accept what had happened, that I had died." Rarity rubbed her hoof gently across the clearly worried pegasus' face. "We all miss our loved ones but there is no changing our fate. Nopony lives forever, even the princesses must inevitably follow."

"I can't be, dead." Rainbow Dash lowered her head in sadness, she couldn't be dead, she needed to take care of her sister. Pinkie couldn't support herself alone, she didn't know how to steal food or bits needed for medications, she was to kind to even think about such things. Her thoughts escaped her as a light blue aura approached her face, carrying with it a golden watch. "What's this?"

"It is your life Rainbow Dash, take a look inside." Rarity lowered the levitating watch into the pegasus' hooves. There was an engraving of a thunderbolt shooting from a cloud on its surface, the same image as her cutie mark. Rainbow cautiously opened the watch to reveal a second identical engraving on the inside. The clock itself was silent, no longer ticking, its hands and dials stuck forever on the time she last remembered. The time when a loud sound came rushing towards her. Tears slowly dropped on the surface of the clock as the realisation finally sunk in her mind. Rarity softly hugged her new friend, helping to support her in her time of need. "It's okay, I am here for you."

A short while passed before Rarity withdrew from her hug, levitating a golden chain around the blue mare's neck. "What's this for?" Rainbow finished drying her uncharacteristic tears.

"Attach your watch to it, as a reminder of your good life." Rarity brought her hoof to show a diamond engraved watch around her own beautiful neck.

Rainbow fitted the watch to the chain, making sure to secure it as she listened to her new friend's words. "I haven't exactly had a 'good' life." She sighed before trotting around in a circle, staring up to the boundless sky. "I can't even remember my parents, having to scavenge all my life for me and my sister. Stealing, cheating, lying, even gambling it all away for nothing." She gazed over to the white mare. "I don't really deserve to be here."

"All ponies go to Heaven." Rarity responded with a caring smile. "You may have had a bad life, but now you can rest in peace and happiness forever, is this not what you have always wanted?"

The pegasus slowly made her way to the edge of the cloud, looking down at the old home that tormented her. "It's not just what I want, Pinkie wants it to. But she is down there, helpless, I don't want her to die to be happy." She turned around grabbing the legs of the white mare. "Please, let me go back. I can't let her suffer I need to keep her safe!"

Rarity shook her head sternly. "You cannot go back, she will find a way to survive and if not. She will find happiness like us."

"She's not going to die!"

"Rainbow Dash." Rarity's voice became bold as she called out over her friends worries. "I know it is painful, believe me, I know. But you need to understand you cannot go back to the world of the living. Even if you could the gates of Heaven would not open for you again, your life has come to a stop."

Rarity gently removed her hoof from her new friend before turning around and trotting across the soft cloud sky. "Come with me Rainbow Dash, I know some other ponies who would love to meet you."

Rainbow didn't move an inch towards her friend, her mind worrying itself with her sister, she couldn't just forget about her and let her die. She couldn't just enjoy heaven and wait for to join in, she can't be so cruel to the only family she knows, one of only two ponies that ever cared for her. 'My life has come to a stop?' Cautiously she reached down to open her golden watch, the representation of her life eternally stuck at the time of her death. "Pinkie." Rainbow knew what she had to do, what she had to try. Carefully she took the winding screw in her lips, and began to turn.

"What are you doing? Rainbow Dash don't do that stop!" Rarity yelled loudly with sheer worry in her voice to try and stop her desperate friend, but her words fell on deaf ears. By either sheer will or luck the watch somehow managed to tick again, the cogs rotated painfully against each other, and the hands moved.

The final words Rainbow heard as she fell towards Equestria rung in her ears. "You can never come back."

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Rainbow Dash awoke to immense pain, coughing up water as her broken body lay sprawled out on a jagged rock being struck by the tide. She could feel her body in agony, large wheel tracks crossed over her body where the heavy cart had run her over, breaking her back left leg as a result, the rest of her limbs were covered in cuts and bruises from the jagged rocks and even teeth marks from some unknown animals who must have been feasting on her tattered dead body. However, aided by the immense pain she felt one thing was for sure. She was alive again.

The barely alive pegasus struggled to lift herself up, checking down on her heavily wounded body. Around her neck lay her golden watch, though there was a difference, the gold looked corroded. Thinking back to the final words she heard, she feared she knew what the corrosion meant. "Pinkie." Rainbow struggled to move her lips, luckily rigor mortis had yet to take effect but it was still difficult to move her broken body after previously leaving it, added to the intoxication which returned more dilute than before.

Putting her worries behind her, the wounded pegasus climbed over the jagged rocks to the shore, cutting herself slightly more in the process. But she didn't care, Rainbow knew what she came back for, she had to help her sister. Even if it had to cost her an eternity of happiness.
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Rainbow Dash awakes confused in a city of clouds, with the aid of a caring unicorn she soon learns the truth of what happened and where she is. But despite Rarity's efforts she can't accept leaving Pinkie Pie alone, fearing she would soon join her if she did.

Part 1: [link]
Part 2: (here)
Part 3: [link]
Part 4: (in creation)
Part 5: (in creation)

Sad, Tragedy, action, light-dark

Using the basic idea of All Dogs go to Heaven, this story develops in a new, more emotional way for the characters involved resulting in a more personal take on the original story.

This chapter is the shortest of the story.

Please leave a comment after reading.

My Little Pony belongs to Hasbro(c) and Lauren Faust.
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~KopaLeo Sep 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
It always struck me as absurd, that anypony in a sensible mind would ever think about giving up eternal happiness (quite cheap eternal happiness BTW, since there is no requirement of believing an unobservable, unprovable God) just to keep her loved ones out of the eternal happiness?

For who would bear the Whips and Scorns of time,
The Oppressor's wrong, the proud man's Contumely,
The pangs of despised Love, the Law’s delay,
The insolence of Office, and the Spurns
That patient merit of the unworthy takes,

Why "grunt and sweat under a weary life" when

to die, to sleep
No more; and by a sleep, to say we end
The heart-ache, and the thousand Natural shocks
That Flesh is heir to? 'Tis a consummation
Devoutly to be wished.

And heaven is guaranteed?
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*Ragnarokia Sep 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Rainbow Dash may have had an eternity of happiness, but knowing below her her sister was suffering without help, likely going to die alone slowly from starvation or illness that she couldn't bring herself to leave her, she had done very little good in her life but the one thing she did have to cling onto was her care for Pinkie. She knew somepony needed to care for her but only she could.
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~KopaLeo Sep 10, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Hmmm... I think I can understand somewhat. It is said that even people who strongly believe in heaven can have fear of death. So there is definitely something deep inside psychology that makes death appear terrible even if there is the eternal happiness ahead.

Do you think RD was trying to spare her sister's suffering, even if that suffering would be short (she couldn't support herself, as is written) and they would meet again in heaven and enjoy eternal happiness soon? Or was it that RD was just overtly occupied with 'staying alive' that she couldn't think straight? ("I don't want her to die to be happy"? that sounds like bad logic to me) Rarity's words were right, in contrast.

As a side note, will RD go to Tartarus? Please don't send her to Tartarus!

As a side side note, I really like a novel about dealing with death, called The Great Blue Yonder. Check it out.
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*Ragnarokia Sep 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Very few people don't fear death, we may accept it as inevitable but when it comes to our time very few would be able to find comfort knowing the end was neigh.

Rainbow knows Pinkie would have happiness after she dies, but she doesn't want her to suffer even if the suffering is short, as long as there was even a small chance for her to return and help to support Pinkie she wanted to do it, she was unable to accept Heaven herself while knowing Pinkie was suffering a fate worse than death, for Rainbow it was quick and merciful but for Pinkie she would starve and die of illness, something she really didn't want her to have to go through. Even if she was unable to alter Pinkie's fate she could at least provide comfort for as long as possible which Rainbow now saw as her only reason for existing.

Rainbow's fate for leaving Heaven would more than likely be Tartarus, that is unless she was able to show she truly deserved the afterlife she so swiftly discarded. I do mean to finish this story but part 4 is still giving me a lot of problems. Hopefully I will get it dealt with soon.
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~shilvicthehedgehog Jun 13, 2012  Student Artist
come on rainbow you can do it pinkie needs you!!!!!
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Mood: Sadness ~fluttershy4455 May 20, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
nice story but sad though. :(
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*Ragnarokia May 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
it is a upsetting, but at least Rainbow Dash managed to gain the chance to try and make a change in her sister's life. Even if it had to cost her own place in Heaven to do so.
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~fluttershy4455 May 20, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
I hope rainbow at least gets to do what she needs to do before it's to late. :(
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*Ragnarokia May 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
She sees it as something she needs to do, she can't think about if she might not be able to.
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~fluttershy4455 May 20, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
most unselfish thing to do.
help her sister in what time she has.
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